How am I supposed to let a child read this? There are so many errors that tripped ME up reading it. Moreover, it would provide a negative writing example for a child reading it.
The stories were fantastical, which should be a good thing, but the writing style made it a less-than-positive one. I get that this is meant for children (I'd say ages 6+ based on the writing), but the writing was beyond childish. I'm not even certain that a proper edit could salvage it.