A Bit Confusing
Maybe it's the fact that there are four sections broken down into more lengthy sections to explain the characters from each dynamic and a fifth section to quickly summarize the previous book.
This took up 161 of the Kindle pages. So, imagine then how difficult it was to keep track of all of the characters and types of characters.
There's also the not-so-subtle didactic verbiage and the rather tiring repeat that a mixed breed child will be the savior of both nations because they are "special".
There was also a choppiness to the writing that was hard to overlook, right from the onset. Here's an example:
Reena is talking to her mother about how her mixed blood makes her special when a chasm opens up beneath her. The mother's strength isn't enough to hold her, to prevent her falling in. "Syreene looked back at her crying mother one last time, before the gap between them stretched into a bottomless pit." This part is rushed, but then the author, for some reason, has Reena reflecting on how she could possibly be savior to her people. Then just as quickly she awakens from a dream.
The story continues from there and wasn't a bad read, but I couldn't help shaking my head at the dialogue which was truly silly sometimes. The story itself wasn't bad, but there were some things that made little sense to me. What does this even mean?
"Though upon catching her breath, a sensation of closeness crept up her skin, locking her tented eyes forward'
What the heck are "tented eyes"? Again, this is just an example of the many times I couldn't quite grasp what the writer was saying, and other times when the writing made little sense because it wasn't written correctly:
"Syreene felt a sharpened jetting wind slice her cheek a trickle of blood down her feet."
I think we're missing words here (and in many other places also) and misspelled words (although not as many). When in conjunction with those weirdly constructed sentences though it makes it tiresome:
"It didn't take much effort for the girl to sweep Syreene by her head [huh?], the lengthy growth wrapping itself around Syreen's [misspelled] mouth with a tightness that rushed all the blood to her skull."
I didn't find much that was overly offensive or overly-adult but I do think this book needs a revamp to make it less tedious to read. It definitely has potential though.
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